2007年2月19日 星期一

英文求職信細節問題 如何讓HR萬裡挑一看上你

寫求職信的目的在於獲得職位,一封求職信無論如何文辭並茂,令人心動,公司HR主管不見到應聘者本人是不會給予工作機會的。因此,求職信的實際目的在於獲得面談的機會。許多人都會copy網上的求職信範本,導致千篇一律,這是非常不可取的。我們已經講過怎樣寫求職信,這次我們來談談求職信寫作中容易被忽略的細節問題。

一、求職信的第一段說明寫信的目的,有些專家認為不宜用分詞句子,比如用下面的句子做開頭,因為這樣的句子被人用得大多,顯得陳腐,失去特點。
Replying to your advertisement...
Answering your advertisement...
Believing that there is an opportunity...
Thinking that there is a vacancy in your company...
Having read your ad...


再比較下面三組例句。每一組裏面(1)句較差,經過修改後(2)句顯得比較恰當。

A:
(1) Replying to your recent advertisement in the Boston Evening Globe, I wish to apply for the position of sales manager.
(2) I am applying for the position of sales manager. I believe my qualifications will meet your exacting requirements.

B:
(1) I believe after reading your advertisement in this morning's Journal that you are offering just the opportunity I am looking for.
(2) Your advertisement in this morning's Journal for an adjustment manager prompted me to apply for this position.

C:
(1) Having read your advertisement in the New York Times for an accountant, I thought you might be interested in my application.
(2) In your advertisement for an accountant, you indicated that you require the services of a competent person, with thorough training in the field of cost accounting. Please consider me an applicant for the position. Here are my reasons for believing I am qualified for this work.

二、在提到希望得到的待遇時,可用類似的句子:
I'd prefer not to set a salary, but since you ask, I consider 6,500 a month to be satisfactory.
It's hard for me to say what my salary should be set at, but if pressed I would have to ask for a month as an initial salary.
I don't feel that I should set my own salary, as I am happy enough to have the privilege of working for you. However, I would consider a month satisfactory compensation for my apprenticeship.

三、提起或要求待遇時不要過分謙虛或表示歉意,下列句子不宜使用:
As for salary, I do not know what to say. Would $ 4,500 a month be too much?
Do you think I would be asking too much if I said 5,000 dollars a month?
You know what my services are worth better than I do. All I want is a living wage.

四、關於求職信的結尾用語,下面也有三組例句。每一組裡面(1)句較差,經過修改後(2)句顯得比較恰當。

A:
(1)軟弱、羞怯的: If you think I can fill the position after you have read my letter, I shall be glad to talk with you.
(2)改寫後(較佳): If my qualifications meet your standards, I would be happy to speak with you in person.

B:
(1)懷疑,不妥、不安全的: If you are interested, please let me know immediately, as I'm sure an interview will convince you I'm the man for the job.
(2)改寫後:I would like to request an interview. You can reach me by telephone at Beijing 123456 between the hours of 7 -9 a .m. and 5:30-9:30p.m. any evening.

C:
(1) 哀求式的句子,不夠完整(漏掉面談時間):I would appreciate the opportunity for an interview. I can be reached by calling Beijing 12345678.

(2) 改寫後: May I have the opportunity to discuss this matter further with you? My telephone number is Beijing 12345678. You can reach me between nine and five o'clock during the day.

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